Sample Paper Grading

Sample 1
     Criterion A: 4
          The analysis of the literary features is what the author mainly focus on in this essay. She does specifically analyzed Margaret's tone, emotion and feelings with referring to direct quotes from the text as well as some specific words. However, she should use "I" instead of "the audience" in her literary analysis. Firstly, audience is a theatrical term, which should not be mentioned here. Also, how the author views her character matters more that what the other readers would think.

     Criterion B: 6
          Compared with the three-page literary analysis, this part just occupies two pages including many irrelevant information. It is good to mention all those detailed body movement made on the stage, but the author does not have the most significant part that relates the literary features with her performing choice made on the stage together.

     Criterion C: 3
          The use of language is not well effective but organized throughout the text. At the beginning, the author does not directly mention her character Margaret but instead lists a series of Richard III's characteristics, which is useless and would be very likely to mislead the whole thesis. Her thesis appears a little late at the end of second paragraph, but after that, the author's language gradually become organized. Except when the author starts to talk about performance, too much useless background information comes out again.

Sample 2
     Criterion A: 5
          The work does show a very detailed literary analysis corresponding with the specific direct quotes from the text. The author not only analyzes her character -- Ophelia's changes, tone, nature and emotions through her language but also demonstrates a detailed explanation about the punctuation, pronouns, repetition of Shakespeare's language. Even better, she concludes her work with a reflection to this performing experience.

     Criterion B: 10
          Combined with the literary analysis, there is also a very detailed and extraordinary description of the author's performance part. From the variation in tone to the very detailed body movement, the blocking ... Every choice the author makes in her performance has a reason that related with the literary features.

     Criterion C: 5
          The author's language is pretty straightforward, effective and well-organized. From the beginning, the author just directly points out her thesis without any useless words. Then, in the following essay, the author starts her analysis step by step by using some words like "the first part", "the second part"... to express her arguments logically.